A new and improved storyboard

Here's the new shot list:

1. (insert production company name here) Presents
2. A film by Sophie Diebold
3. BARELY LEGAL
4. Several close-up shots of posters (no specific number)
5. close up shot of electric guitar
6. Shot of record playing
7. Shot of boots she'll be wearing
8. shot of flier next to $7 and bottle caps
9. shot of cigarette box sitting on nightstand
10. shot of back of subject undressing from the shoulders up
11. shot of pile of clothing where t-shirt lands
12. pan up mid shot of subject putting on a new shirt (this is where her face is introduced)
13. Several shots of dialogue (her looking at herself in the mirror while rehearsing what she would say)
14. mid-shot of her looking at the mirror while honking of horn is heard in the background
15. shot of her peeking through the curtains to see outside, and then rushing off
16. shot of her hand turning off the record player (music stops)
17.  shot of her hand grabbing the boots
18. shot of her hand grabbing the band flier
19. shot of her opening the door, leaving the room, and shutting it
20. shot of her coming back into her room
21. closeup shot of her grabbing the cigarettes off her nightstand
22. shot of her leaving the room and shutting the door

Notes:

• When she turns off the record player, the music will stop in the background, as it will be diegetic sound. However, I am not sure if I should include that shot before she grabs everything, or after, so the music still plays until the very last moment when she leaves
• Once the honking starts, it will still be heard continuously in the background, to indicate that the person picking her up is in a hurry
• shots 19, 20, and 22 will be one continuous shot, and I will edit in shot 21.